[Prompt: What sort of work did you do (include summer employment)?]

For the past seven years, I have worked at Bio Nuclear Diagnostics Inc (BND), where I learned about the business aspects of medicine. My contribution to the development of new ideas for the improvement of existing medical products, such as the cervical brush used in pap smears, has taught me the importance of self-directed learning. I can now recognize areas in which my knowledge is incomplete and can actively seek out the necessary information by reading texts, analyzing existing models and consulting physicians and specialists. These techniques of self-directed learning will surely help me conquer the challenges of medical school and the medical profession.

Working at BND has also helped me become an effective team member. As part of the production team, I discovered the importance of sharing and accepting criticism. I understand how to deliver feedback without judging or discouraging others, and I use the advice of others to improve my own behavior. I have also developed sensitivity, respect for others and excellent communication skills. These qualities will help me work effectively in small groups in medical school and as part of a team with other physicians.

In addition to my work throughout the academic year, I have had a significant amount of clinical experience. As a clinical research student at the Ontario Cancer Institute and the Toronto Hospital with the Women's Health department, I cultivated my interpsersonal skills and gained insight into helping improve the quality of health of others. My responsibilities as a research student primarily included recruiting patients for the project, whose aim was to assess patients' views on their illness and treatment at the hospital. I discovered how to identify non-verbal cues, a skill which allowed me to better communicate with patients.

I took part in a second project which sought to design a survey for physicians in order to assess their treatment of cervical cancer in East Asian women. The small group atmosphere allowed me to once again strengthen my resourcefulness as I read to through a large amount of research material. Both projects provided me with the opportunity to cultivate my communication, critical thinking and team skills, all of which have helped me work effectively with co-workers and patients in the clinic.

Finally, as a physician's assistant at a family practice in rural Pickering, Ontario, I received even more clinical experience. Here my responsibilities included performing ECGs and pulmonary function tests, as well as taking some preliminary patient history. I strengthened my confidence in the clinic and learned the importance of professionalism in medicine. I continue to cultivate my communication and interpersonal skills and learn much about the personal sacrifices which physicians often make. My work at the family practice continues to teach me lessons in empathy -- an invaluable quality of caregivers.

文章點(diǎn)評(píng)：

這篇短文以自己過(guò)去的職業(yè)經(jīng)歷作為切入點(diǎn)，結(jié)合自己對(duì)未來(lái)的職業(yè)發(fā)展方向和興趣做出了進(jìn)一步的闡述和期望，使讀者可以清楚的了解到作者的所要表達(dá)的寫(xiě)作意圖。

文章開(kāi)頭就開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山地直接開(kāi)始描述自己的職業(yè)經(jīng)歷，說(shuō)明自己在工作中的責(zé)任和收獲。文章的結(jié)尾再次提到了申請(qǐng)者在學(xué)術(shù)和問(wèn)題解決能力，使閱讀者有了一個(gè)總結(jié)性的感受，了解到作者是一個(gè)很有工作經(jīng)歷的人。文章條理安排得很不錯(cuò)。

文件中間幾段主要是對(duì)作者的職業(yè)經(jīng)歷做了一個(gè)比較詳細(xì)的闡述，這樣可以表現(xiàn)出申請(qǐng)者豐富的職業(yè)經(jīng)歷和深化的學(xué)術(shù)背景，也可以讓審查人員知道申請(qǐng)者使一個(gè)有能力，出色的，有能夠完成課程能力的一個(gè)申請(qǐng)者。專(zhuān)業(yè)素養(yǎng)是審查人員重要審查的一個(gè)方面，因此，作者對(duì)于自己的能力的描寫(xiě)作用是非常大的。對(duì)錄取起到?jīng)Q定作用。

譯文：

命題要求：你做了什么樣的工作（包括暑假職業(yè)）？

過(guò)去七年, 我在生物核診斷公司(BND)工作, 我在這里得知了醫(yī)學(xué)的企業(yè)方面知識(shí)。我的對(duì)新想法的發(fā)展的貢獻(xiàn)為現(xiàn)有的醫(yī)療產(chǎn)品的改善, 譬如子宮刷被應(yīng)用在乳頭瘤上, 教我自學(xué)的重要性。我現(xiàn)在認(rèn)可我的知識(shí)是不全面的和只是通過(guò)積極的閱讀的課本獲得, 分析現(xiàn)有的模型和咨詢醫(yī)師和專(zhuān)家。這些自我導(dǎo)向的學(xué)習(xí)肯定會(huì)幫助我征服醫(yī)學(xué)院和醫(yī)療領(lǐng)域的挑戰(zhàn)。

在BND 工作還幫助了我成為一名有效的隊(duì)員。作為生產(chǎn)隊(duì)一部分, 我發(fā)現(xiàn)了分享和接受批評(píng)的重要性。我了解在沒(méi)有判斷或勸阻其他人的情況下怎么提供反饋, 并且我使用其他人的忠告改進(jìn)我自己的行為。我并且開(kāi)發(fā)了對(duì)其他人的敏感性、尊敬和優(yōu)秀表達(dá)能力。這些質(zhì)量將幫助我有效地在醫(yī)學(xué)院的小組里工作和與其它醫(yī)師成為隊(duì)里的一部分。

除我的工作之外的學(xué)年過(guò)程中, 我有相當(dāng)數(shù)量臨床經(jīng)驗(yàn)。作為一名在安大略巨蟹星座學(xué)院和多倫多醫(yī)院女性健康部門(mén)臨床研究學(xué)生, 我培養(yǎng)了我的溝通技巧并且獲得了改進(jìn)其他人的健康質(zhì)量的洞察力。作為研究生，我的責(zé)任主要包括為項(xiàng)目招錄患者, 目標(biāo)是接近病人對(duì)他們的病癥和治療醫(yī)院的看法。我發(fā)現(xiàn)了怎么辨認(rèn)非語(yǔ)言的暗示, 這種允許我與患者更好交流的技巧。

我參與的第二個(gè)項(xiàng)目是尋求設(shè)計(jì)一次調(diào)查來(lái)讓醫(yī)師去估計(jì)在東亞婦女的子宮頸癌的治療的情況。當(dāng)我讀了很多研究材料之后，小組的氣氛允許我再次加強(qiáng)我的足智多謀。兩個(gè)項(xiàng)目提供我以機(jī)會(huì)來(lái)培養(yǎng)我交流, 批判和團(tuán)隊(duì)協(xié)作的能力, 幫助了我在診所與工友和患者有效地工作。

最后, 作為一個(gè)在Pickering, 安大略農(nóng)村家庭實(shí)踐的醫(yī)生的助理, 我接受了更加臨床經(jīng)驗(yàn)。我的責(zé)任包括執(zhí)行ECGs 和肺功能檢測(cè), 并且采取一些初步病史。我加強(qiáng)了我的對(duì)診所的信心和學(xué)會(huì)了在醫(yī)學(xué)職業(yè)化的重要性。我繼續(xù)培養(yǎng)我的交流能力和學(xué)會(huì)關(guān)于醫(yī)師經(jīng)常要做出的個(gè)人犧牲。我在家庭實(shí)踐的工作繼續(xù)教我——照料者的無(wú)價(jià)的質(zhì)量。