Statement of purpose which includes applicants reasons for undertaking graduate work, explanation of study interests, and their relation to the applicant's undergraduate study and professional goals.

點(diǎn)評：第一段是一個單獨(dú)的部分，是全文內(nèi)容的總結(jié)，介紹了文章中自己所介紹的內(nèi)容，使閱讀者可以不看文章，先了解到里面的大致內(nèi)容。開篇方法比較新穎。

The decision for me to become an industrial relations major was not really my own, I have to admit. My uncle, a human resource manager with Welch-Ally, spent the majority of every holiday gathering throughout my senior year of high school trying to dissuade me from becoming a business major. He would tell me, "This is a rare undergraduate degree and a growing field." Then he would frighten me by saying, "We have very similar personalities, so you would be a fantastic H.R. manager." Eventually he convinced me that it was my best option. And I haven't regretted it.

點(diǎn)評：第二段介紹他選擇這個專業(yè)時(shí)，家里的反對，選材比較也特點(diǎn)。主要是為下文做鋪墊。

Although I credit my uncle with inspiring my initial decision, my constantly growing interest in this field and desire to continue my education has grown from two sources: the Industrial Relations faculty at Lemoyne and my vocation as a martial arts instructor for almost five years. From my professors, I have learned the practical side of my intended profession: the multitude of laws protecting worker's rights in the workplace, procedures for collective bargaining and arbitration, and how compensation systems function. My job, on the other hand, has helped me acquire the "people" skills that are crucial to being an effective H.R. manager. In the course of a normal workday, I must communicate with a diverse group of people ranging in age from three to seventy-two years old. Each student has unique needs and goals that I must identify and pay attention to. I must constantly evaluate students and give them constructive feedback, walking that fine line between support and criticism. At the same time, I delegate tasks to the less senior instructors and class helpers, while helping them improve their teaching skills. It is challenging and constantly educational. These two sources, my professors and my job, have succeeded in transforming a disinterested college freshman into a senior who has a focused career path.

點(diǎn)評：這段是全文中比較關(guān)鍵的一個點(diǎn)，是一個轉(zhuǎn)折點(diǎn)。作者通過自己自身的體驗(yàn)和理解，在實(shí)踐中真正認(rèn)識到了這個專業(yè)的作用和重要性，從不理解演變成喜愛上這個專業(yè)。寫出了作者對專業(yè)的認(rèn)識和作用，乃至決定申請更高的學(xué)位，進(jìn)行深入的學(xué)習(xí)。

My ultimate career goal is to be a general human resource manager or recruiter for a high-tech or pharmaceutical company. These are industries in which I foresee great potential for growth in the future. I enjoy every aspect of my major, and I look forward to the variety of tasks and obstacles I will face as an H.R. manager. The prospect of interacting with people on a daily basis appeals to me immensely in a job. Working as a recruiter likewise interests me because it would involve convincing potential employees to work for my company. This is precisely what I do at my current job. It is my responsibility to make new students feel at ease, develop rapport with them quickly, and then sell our program's values and benefits. All of my experience would be relevant and useful to a career as an H.R. manager.

點(diǎn)評：這段作者描寫了一下自己通過學(xué)習(xí)后，對職業(yè)的展望和目標(biāo)。同時(shí)體現(xiàn)出了畢業(yè)后，自己在專業(yè)上的提高和對職業(yè)的幫助，自己利用所學(xué)知識快樂工作，享受工作的愉悅。是作者對今后就業(yè)和職業(yè)目標(biāo)的認(rèn)識體現(xiàn)。

Cornell University represents an attractive program for me because the curriculum is practical and many of the classes utilize computers and software specifically designed for human resources. Also, a Master's degree from a well-respected program like Cornell would be essential in helping me achieve my goal of working for a large, possibly Fortune 500 company. I ask that you examine my grades to see the discrepancy between my Freshman/Sophomore and Junior/Senior years. The change reflects my growing interest in industrial relations and my ability to balance working almost full-time with being a full-time commuting student. If accepted, I will bring to Cornell a strong academic background in human resources and hands-on management experience. I am extremely committed to my career goals, and I believe that attending Cornell will help me fulfill them.

點(diǎn)評：最后一段沒有什么特別的，是傳統(tǒng)的結(jié)尾方式。主要就是說一下說一些學(xué)校好，和自己畢業(yè)后的目標(biāo)及改變。

點(diǎn)評：

文章大綱：

本文從結(jié)構(gòu)上來看，主要分為四大部分，第一部分是第一段和第二段，主要是為下文作鋪墊，從側(cè)面反映出選擇此專業(yè)的決心；第二部分是第二段，是文章的核心，通過寫自己的實(shí)際經(jīng)歷，展現(xiàn)了自己喜愛上這個專業(yè)的過程和對專業(yè)的認(rèn)識。體現(xiàn)了相關(guān)的專業(yè)背景和優(yōu)勢，不僅層次感很強(qiáng)，而且描寫得很細(xì)致。第三部分是第四段，激情澎湃的展現(xiàn)了自己運(yùn)用所學(xué)知識在工作中的表現(xiàn)，使文章升華到達(dá)高潮。第四部分是結(jié)尾，作者結(jié)合自己的職業(yè)理想直接點(diǎn)明康乃爾大學(xué)此項(xiàng)目的優(yōu)勢以及我的加入能帶來的價(jià)值，同時(shí)大膽的給自己的職業(yè)目標(biāo)進(jìn)行了規(guī)劃。

中心思想

文章以作者不顧家里反對，選擇專業(yè)，認(rèn)識專業(yè)和喜愛專業(yè)為主線，展開一系列的描寫。很好的體現(xiàn)出了自己喜愛上這個專業(yè)的原因和決定把它定位自己職業(yè)目標(biāo)的過程。

素材取材

取材全部是自己的親身經(jīng)歷，選材合理，真實(shí)生動。全文主要圍繞自己的興趣展開，這是貫穿全文的一條主線。

本文立意

本文開篇就先點(diǎn)明了全篇的內(nèi)容，整篇文章是以作者追求和奮斗的過程立意的。

可以借鑒的地方

本文邏輯合理，語言簡練，思路清晰，雖然跨專業(yè)申請，但很好的體現(xiàn)了自己的興趣，學(xué)習(xí)經(jīng)歷，同時(shí)很自然的把自己的經(jīng)歷跟申請專業(yè)結(jié)合。選材方式很合理，體現(xiàn)了自己的相關(guān)優(yōu)勢。值得借鑒。

譯文：

這篇個人陳述中包括了我申請研究生項(xiàng)目的動機(jī)，興趣的介紹，本科階段專業(yè)學(xué)習(xí)背景與申請項(xiàng)目之間的關(guān)系，和我的職業(yè)的目標(biāo)。

選擇勞資關(guān)系專業(yè)起初并不是我自己的想法，我必須承認(rèn)。我的叔叔是一位資源管理經(jīng)理，他用大部分節(jié)假日時(shí)間，來試圖勸，讓我主修商科。他告訴我，“這是一個非常杰出的學(xué)位、一個正在成長的領(lǐng)域”。當(dāng)時(shí)他還用諺語嚇唬我“我們有非常相同的性格，因此你將成為一個很好的人力資源經(jīng)理?！弊詈笏_信那將是我最好的選擇。那樣我將沒有任何遺憾。

雖然我相信叔叔最初給我灌輸思想，但后來，我在這個領(lǐng)域逐漸增強(qiáng)了興趣，繼續(xù)學(xué)習(xí)愿望也增強(qiáng)了。主要來自兩個方面：勞資關(guān)系的才能和我將近5年的武術(shù)教師的職業(yè)。從我的教授那里，我學(xué)到了這個職業(yè)比較實(shí)用的一面：在車間，勞資雙方針對工資等問題進(jìn)行談判、仲裁，賠償制度的職責(zé)，所有這些方面多數(shù)法律是保護(hù)工人的權(quán)利的。我的工作，在另一方面，已經(jīng)幫助我學(xué)到了人力資源管理這方面的技巧，這對于我成為一個出色的人力資源經(jīng)理是至關(guān)重要的。在正常的工作期間，我必須和不同的人群交流包括3歲到72歲的人們。每個學(xué)生都有不同的需求和目標(biāo)我必須識別和注意。我必須經(jīng)常的評價(jià)學(xué)生并且給他們建設(shè)性的反饋，在支持和批評之間要有獎罰分明的線路。同時(shí)，我給少數(shù)的高級教師和班級助手委派任務(wù)以便幫助他們提高教學(xué)技能。它是負(fù)有挑戰(zhàn)性的和教育性的。這兩個來源，我的教授和我的工作，已經(jīng)成功的轉(zhuǎn)化成了一個無私的學(xué)院，即新生進(jìn)入更高一級的職業(yè)通道。

我最終的職業(yè)目標(biāo)是成為一個人力資源經(jīng)理或者招聘人員，針對那些高科技或者藥物公司。這些行業(yè)是我預(yù)知的將來最有增長潛力的行業(yè)。我喜歡我專業(yè)的每一個方面，我期盼任務(wù)的變化，及作為一個人力資源經(jīng)理我將面對的障礙。工作中與人相互影響的前景無限，吸引著我。作為招聘人員同樣的使我產(chǎn)生興趣，因?yàn)榱钊诵欧模袧摿Φ穆毠ぜ磳槲业墓竟ぷ?。這正是我目前所做的工作。使新的學(xué)生感到自由自在、迅速的與他們發(fā)展和諧的關(guān)系，然后出售我們的項(xiàng)目價(jià)值和利益，這是我的責(zé)任。所有我的這些經(jīng)驗(yàn)對于一個人力資源經(jīng)理的職業(yè)生涯都是相關(guān)的和有用的。

對于我來說康乃爾大學(xué)的項(xiàng)目對我表現(xiàn)出了很大吸引力，因?yàn)樗恼n程是實(shí)用的，并且多數(shù)上層社會，利用計(jì)算機(jī)軟件特定的設(shè)計(jì)來做人力資源。而且，來自康乃爾大學(xué)這個非常受尊敬的學(xué)位項(xiàng)目，將從本質(zhì)上幫助我達(dá)到我要進(jìn)入世界500強(qiáng)公司的目標(biāo)。我要求你們檢查我的等級以便了解我的大學(xué)三年之間的差異。這個差異反映了我在勞資關(guān)系方面正在增長的興趣和平衡全部工作時(shí)間的能力。如果我被你們接受，我將帶給康乃爾大學(xué)堅(jiān)固的人力資源理論背景和我的管理經(jīng)驗(yàn)。我非常的終于我的職業(yè)目標(biāo)，我相信參加康乃爾大學(xué)將幫助我實(shí)現(xiàn)我的職業(yè)理想。