My interest in photojournalism began when I was nine years old. After a couple of years of collecting baseball picture-cards and accumulating more than ten-thousand treasured images, my interest in acquiring posed mug shots and static faces decreased, so I liquidated my assets and discovered a new hobby: reading the sports sections of my father’s newspapers. I became captivated by the genuine, timely and action-packed pictures of the 1964 Phillies appearing regularly in the Philadelphia Daily News and Inquirer. A short time later, I began a nightly ritual of clipping and collecting the grainy black-and-white photos accompanying detailed descriptions of our home team’s performances.

點評：這部分很自然的介紹了自己興趣的產(chǎn)生，語言精練。

In 1979,I resumed the practice of clipping tear-sheets, when my byline started appearing under photos and short concert reviews published in several South Philadelphia community newspapers. After some success selling articles and pictures to local, small circulation publications, I enrolled in college, determined to pursue a career in photojournalism, and became the only member of my family to graduate from an academic institution of higher education when I received a BFA in documentary photography. Although I am extremely satisfied with my current employment as a photographer for a world-renowned eye hospital and will continue to write articles and to photograph events on a free-lance basis, I would also eventually like to teach. With my previous experience in photojournalism, travel, politics, medicine, sports and entertainment, and as the overseer of our department’s medical photography internship program, I feel that I will make a significant contribution to the learning environment.

點評：這部分是文章的核心，介紹了自己在學習和實踐方面的成就，為自己職業(yè)目標的轉(zhuǎn)折作鋪墊，利用自己在攝影這方面的優(yōu)勢從事教學工作。

點評：

文章大綱：

本文共分兩部分，第一部分重點介紹了自己興趣的由來，第二部分簡練的表達了自己的將來的職業(yè)規(guī)劃，整個過程中滲透了自己在攝影這方面的學習和實踐經(jīng)歷，以寫實的手法含蓄的表達了自己的專業(yè)背景及優(yōu)勢。

主要內(nèi)容：

本人由作者小時候的由于手機籃球卡片，而對新聞攝影產(chǎn)生了興趣，通過看體育報紙進一步激發(fā)了對攝影的熱愛。以至于后來從事這個職業(yè)并成功的發(fā)售了自己的圖片和發(fā)表論文以及拿到證書，基于自己這樣的成就，希望可以為教育事業(yè)做出貢獻。

素材取材：

本人取材主要是圍繞自己的專業(yè)實際經(jīng)歷來展開。

立意：

本文大多數(shù)在寫實，由自己的真實經(jīng)歷來襯托自己未來的計劃，合情合理，上下思路銜接的非常自然。

可以借鑒的地方：

本文用最精煉的語言描述了自己的專業(yè)成就，全用寫實的手法，給人深刻的真實感，結(jié)尾自然的闡述了自己職業(yè)計劃的轉(zhuǎn)變，而且進一步間接的強調(diào)了自己在攝影這方面的強大的實力。這種側(cè)面渲染的手法很值得借鑒和學習，更有說服力。

譯文：

新聞攝影記者

我9歲的時候?qū)π侣剶z影產(chǎn)生了興趣。兩年我收集了上萬張的籃球卡片，我發(fā)現(xiàn)了我的新興趣：閱讀我父親報紙的體育欄目。我被1964費城日報上和探索者上發(fā)表的真實地照片所迷住。隨后，我開始收集我們家鄉(xiāng)主隊表演的圖片并在下面加以描述。

1979年，當有我署名的照片開始公開發(fā)表現(xiàn)在南費城社區(qū)的報紙上的時候，我開始把這些復制寄給讀者。在我的圖片和論文成功的在本地發(fā)行售賣以后，我登記進入了大學學習，堅定了我從事攝影新聞工作的目標，當我拿到記錄新聞攝影BFA的證書的時候，我成了我們家族唯一的一個在這方面取得高學歷受到高等教育的人。盡管我對我現(xiàn)在在世界著名的眼科醫(yī)院擔任攝影師的工作非常滿意，并且我將繼續(xù)我在這方面文章的寫作和繼續(xù)用照片記錄這些大事件的發(fā)表，但是我更愿意最終從事教育的工作。用我以前在新聞攝影、旅行、政治、醫(yī)學、體育和娛樂界的經(jīng)驗，和作為我們醫(yī)學攝影實習項目的組長，我感覺將來我會為學術(shù)界做出重大的貢獻。